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She always said her perfect man would always know who he was and what he was made of.

She asked me to describe myself in one word.
I said I couldn’t do that; she didn’t need to hurt.
She plain walked out the door; her crying was the last thing I heard.
After she left I couldn’t help but think back on what she had asked.
I’m sick, I’m poison, I’m no good, and frozen in my state of mind.
I’m hostile and bitter; I look at my eyes in the mirror and hatred is all I find.
If I had to describe myself in one word it would be, virulent, the perfect word for me.
©2008-2009 =sweetsmcguire
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Something I came up with on a whim. (he's evil isn't he?) Enjoy! :boing:

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:iconcheekypikachu:
wow thats deep......... :boing::boing::boing::boing::boing::boing:

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Yes we all know that SasuNaru would smash any Naruto couple except for KakaIru...:nod:

But all of you don't realize that sasUKE's name has a hidden message...:giggle:

He was born to be an uke, duh his name is sasUKE for a reason :blush:
:iconmckadesinsanity:
Wow! You have such an incredible way with words, it literally makes my skin crawl sometimes. (not in bad way, mind you. Its like...well, I don't know how to explain it. Its almost..ghostly?)

Anyway..about this piece. Its very moving and quite sad. Sounds like he was harboring some pretty bad stuff! My only critique (as if you were looking for one) is that it was much too short. Splendid work! :worship:

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[www.salizabeth.net]
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Thanks, pika-chan! :hug:

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She asked me to describe myself in one word.
I said I couldn’t do that; she didn’t need to hurt. See More!
:iconsweetsmcguire:
Thank you for your wonderful comment!!! :glomp:

Ghostly? I can see how that may fit sometimes. :XD:

It's strange sometimes to hear what other people think about my work! In your comment you said: Its very moving and quite sad. I myself had not really looked at it that way. I knew it was kinda sad but mostly I was focused on his rough attitude that I hadn't noticed or thought deeply of anything else I suppose. He is harboring some really bad stuff, he's very angry and sad inside. Maybe I will write a story about his past, do you think I should?

Thanks again! :heart:

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She asked me to describe myself in one word.
I said I couldn’t do that; she didn’t need to hurt. See More!
:iconcheekypikachu:
no problem at all ^^

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Yes we all know that SasuNaru would smash any Naruto couple except for KakaIru...:nod:

But all of you don't realize that sasUKE's name has a hidden message...:giggle:

He was born to be an uke, duh his name is sasUKE for a reason :blush:
:iconsweetsmcguire:
Hmm...maybe I will. :D (maybe)

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She asked me to describe myself in one word.
I said I couldn’t do that; she didn’t need to hurt. See More!
:iconradama:
wow.....just, wow....That's very depressing....yet all in all, it's a very good piece

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Naruto: So I've got the right affinity for Sasuke...
Yamoto: Right...only wind can beat lightning
Naruto: No, I mean...
Yamoto: ?
Naruto: The only thing that can save a fire from dying and give it even more power is wind
Yamoto: .......True
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Thank you, miss rada! :hug:

I didn't mean to depress you...It didn't did it? :tears:

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She asked me to describe myself in one word.
I said I couldn’t do that; she didn’t need to hurt. See More!

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